Saturday, February 13, 2010

intro 1 cause essays (second take)

Have you ever been so head over heels with someone it takes your breath away? Or experienced being so tongue tied no sound escapes your lips when you try to speak? Your heart is beating so rapid you swear it will pop out of your chest. Every waking moment your brain is flooded with thoughts of this person, so much that you can never fall asleep. If you have experienced any of these feelings, you were probably in love or were you? Love is a powerful drug; it can give you the feeling of joy, happiness and security but it can also make you feel lonely, sad and abandoned. When love is good, it’s like a fix, fuel you can’t live without it. When love is bad, that fix, like a bad batch can kill you. It’s hard to believe the meaning of love for one can give the feeling of being on top of the world but for another it makes them feel like crawling under a rock; complete opposites. So why do those who experience negative feelings of emotion call this love? Shouldn’t they call it loathe?

1 comment:

  1. Better ending here than in version 1, because we can see that you're about to tell us why we call it love when it's loathe. But the lead-in here, for me, is not as strong as the 'do you need a roommate' in version 1.

    Combine?

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